I find Garuda's story very interesting. It's as though a background story of Proxy herself, good job!
As to Nutkip, I find your story as an other context of the two games and a synopsis of them too, really intriguing .
But! I think Garuda is going to win this, it's a very deep story, you know what I mean? too much details. even though there are typos here and there, it's still good.